In order to make my essay better, Alissa suggested that I put more conversation into it. I think that is a really good idea and I plan on doing so. I believe that I can also make my essay more descriptive. I plan on building up anticipation in parts of my essay to leave the reader wondering what will happen next. I believe the peer edit was beneficial to us all as writers; we take in feedback better if it is from one of our peers.
My detailed revision plan includes: checking for punctuation and grammatical errors, adding in more conversation and description, and having a friend edit my paper for any other possible errors. I might take my paper to the Writers Room.
Alissa also suggested to me that I should not make the outcome of events so noticeable. I’m going to work on that part of my essay as well adding in my detail for a dramatic effect. I believe my paragraph order is in chronological order, so I don’t think that I will change that around.
I’m going to re-read my paper backwards from finish to start, so I can check for grammatical and punctuation errors better. I was taught this technique last semester and I think that it works really well. You catch things that may not be noticeable to you if you read your paper from start to finish in the revision stage.
Overall, I believe that I did a really good job on my essay; I’m not saying that it’s perfect because there’s always room for improvement!
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